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Thursday, December 6, 2012

The True Treasure


Author’s Note: This is a creative response and prediction of the ending to the 3:15 story Buried Treasure. The story was about an old man named Clarence who, in an accident with his dad, got his arm cut off by a falling tree. Now, in its place is a golden hook that he wants his friend Cody to bury with him when he dies. Just before the real ending was revealed, Cody had taken the hook with him after Clarence was dead to smelt into a gold bar.


Cody stood there, standing, observing the bright, golden hook. He felt as though he could drown in his own sweat." What should be done with this thing" he thought as he kept hearing the voice of Clarence ring in his head. "Bury me with my treasure". He contemplated this for quite some time and came to a conclusion. He would bury Clarence with his real treasure, the axe that brought him is fortune. Cody rushed back to the grave and worked through the night, digging out the coffin out of the ground. Finally he lifted the door to the coffin, peer inside and saw Clarence laying there, the same way as he was a day ago. Cody then ran into the cabin, retrieved the axe, but also saw his shotgun. Cody remembered stories Clarence had told him about hunting with it, so he took it with him. Anxious to be done with his deed, Cody sprinted to the coffin, a deadly mistake. As Cody ran, the shotgun banged against his leg, and in turn, shot him in the foot. He tumbled into the coffin with the axe, hook, and shotgun. To greaten his misfortune, the axe was sticking straight up towards Cody. When he fell into the coffin, the axe lodged itself into Cody's chest and the coffin door closed behind him. Now Clarence was buried with his treasure, along with a greedy 15 year old boy.

1 comment:

  1. First of all in the author's note it should be melt, not smelt. And also in the middle of your story it doesn't make very much sense when you say digging out the coffin out of the ground. Maybe you could add a comma or something else where you don't have to say out twice. But overall it was written pretty well and I like your describing words. Nice Job.

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